What should have been

buffgirl

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What should have been

זהו הניסיון הראשון שלי לכתוב סצינה על הבית הלבן ובכלל. אני יודעת שזה לא בדיוק כמו תסריטים, אבל אין לי שום ידע בעניין, אז בבקשה סלחו לי על הבורות. הצהרה: כל הדמויות שייכות שיוצרי הסידרה "הבית הלבן". העלילה וכל השאר שייך לי ולי בלבד. © כל הזכויות שמורות. הסצינה מדברת על מה שהיה יכול להיות בין ג'וש ודונה אם הם לא היו עוצרים את עצמם אין ספוילרים ועונה מדוייקת, אבל אני מעדיפה שתחשבו על זה אחרי שדונה התבטרה כי לפי דעתי מערכת יחסים לא יכולה ממש להתקיים בין השניים כשהיא כפופה אליו. מקווה שתהנו מהקריאה ואני אשמח לפידבאקים, אבל go easy on me..

The couple go back to Donna's apartment after en event or something, and Josh ever-so-charmingly walks her home because he's so cute and lovable. It's very cold out side and you can see the both of them are freazing. Donna asks him if he wants to come up as they approach to her building. He seems a bit astound, but says "s-sure, why not?" and they both smile. He opens the buliding door for her like a true gentleman and she comes in, then he. CUT TO DONNA'S FLOOR, THE HALL Donna opens her door and they both come in. When they get inside Donna hang's her coat and they both stand next to her front door which isn't closed yet. JOSH IS IN FRONT OF THE DOOR AND DONNA IS WITH HER BACK TO IT. THEY'RE FACING EACHOTHER. Josh says something about the very cold weather and then adds a funny remark and then there's an awkward and silent moment where they both just look at each over, after which Donna kisses Josh and he's so shy and... well, cute. The long and tender kiss end and they both drive away from each over and smile, embarrassly. They move a bit to the right, so if you passed by on the hall you could see them through the crack between the door and the doorpost. Josh looks at Donna and then drives nearer, a sirious look on his face, an hypnotic one, you can see he's enchanted. Donna's smile fades and she looks at him, breathing a bit more heavily then usual. He moves his hand and caresses her hair, then gently move it to her chick. He kisses her. The kiss is more passionate this time, looks like all the heat that they were holding inside had finally burst out and they're not gonna hold it back anymore. The camera drives away from them, showing them still kissing, from the hall point of view. Josh Closes the door. END OF SCENE.​
 

buffgirl

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The couple goes back to Donna's apartment after en event or something, and Josh ever-so-charmingly walks her home, because he's so cute and lovable. It's very cold outside and you can see that both of them are freazing. Donna asks him if he wants to come upstairs, as they approach her building. He seems a bit astounded, but says "s-sure, why not?" and they both smile. He opens the buliding door for her like a true gentleman and she comes in, followed by him. CUT TO DONNA'S FLOOR, THE HALL Donna opens her door and they both come in. When they get inside, Donna hangs her coat and they both stand next to her front door which isn't closed yet. JOSH IS IN FRONT OF THE DOOR AND DONNA IS WITH HER BACK TO IT. THEY'RE FACING EACHOTHER. Josh says something about the very cold weather and then adds a funny remark. Then, there's an awkward,silent moment where they both just look at eachother, after which Donna kisses Josh. He's so shy and... well, cute. The long and tender kiss ends, and they both drive away from eachother, smiling embarrassedly. They move a bit to the right, so if you passed by on the hall you could see them through the crack between the door and the doorpost. Josh looks at Donna and then drives nearer, a serious look on his face, an hypnotic one. You can see he's enchanted. Donna's smile fades and she looks at him, breathing a bit more heavily than usual. He moves his hand and caresses her hair, then gently moves it to her cheek. He kisses her. The kiss is more passionate this time. It looks as if all the heat they were holding inside had finally burst out and they're not going to hold it back anymore. The camera drives away from them, showing them still kissing, from the hall point of view. Josh Closes the door. END OF SCENE.​
 
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